My Revision Plan For English Prompt 2: I am planning to incorporate longer quotes into my essay. I sometimes tend to use short, simple quotes, considering they are easy to explain and connect to an argument. Another goal of mine is to fix the introduction paragraph of my essay. I usually make my introduction paragraphs … [Read more…]
In an interview with Ken MacArthur, a 54-year-old man from Boston, Massachusettes, he teaches us that his life was interrupted by an obstacle that would forever change his life story. In Julie Beck’s “Life’s Stories”, she emphasizes the point that life stories are supposed to show the world who you are and it is your … [Read more…]
Beck’s “Life’s Stories” was pretty straight forward the first time. It was somewhat easy to read because of the way she sets up her argument and explains her self. There were some sentences and paragraphs throughout the essay that had me confused, but reading it over a second time and annotating it again had really … [Read more…]
Galen’s argument was sort of confusing because he used quotes and studies to back up other people’s arguments, not his own. The way he begins his introduction reminds me a lot of how Erard begins his, which using the “They Say/I Say” format. He states where he stands in the argument, and then totally contradicts … [Read more…]
While reading Julie Beck’s “Life’s Stories” article, I found myself relating to a lot of the quotes and points she was making. In the second and third pages, she writes a lot about how the brains of children and adults are different. It was very interesting and it was something I had never really found … [Read more…]
While reading the “Grading Rubric and Check List,” I found myself learning more and more about the writing process. These four points are the points where I found the most learning opportunity. Under the Position and Intro section, it says to watch out for a scattered intro that crams in too much. I think that … [Read more…]
Part 1: While reading Lamott’s “Shitty First Drafts”, I noticed a similarity between my first draft and the one Lamott described, except there is a huge difference. The embarrassing, terrible, “child’s draft” that no one is supposed to ever see is seen by a few of my lucky peers. This creates a rather large difference … [Read more…]
First off, this is an amazing, well-developed essay. Your argument was very strong, and you included some very good points. In the very beginning of your essay, your hook just drew me right in. Right off, I knew what your argument was going to be about. Throughout the essay, you included very strong sentences that … [Read more…]
Growing up in a small town of Alfred, Maine, my parents would always say, “The world is your oyster”, and I had always taken that with a grain of salt. As a child, I was always very confused because the world was not literally an oyster. Soon after, I realized the significance and the meaning … [Read more…]
